Thank you for all of your comments. Both myself and the children really enjoyed the project. Writing a story in this way was a new experience for all of us and presented a few challenges along the way. This project is something I hope to do on a whole class basis in the future. Mr Harrison
Thank you for all of your coments but i really liked jackies ending .And i really enjoyed it.by Tyros
i loved you're coments but i realy liked jackies ending.and loved doing the story. by Adam.
Thank you for all your commets.I liked all your ideas for an ending.By Emily
all your cooments are great.by brandon.
Friday, 19 March 2010
Wednesday, 17 March 2010
Hi as part of my PGCE project. I have been experimenting with using ICT to help children collaborate and write stories. I told 2 groups of 3 children from my year 4 class to write a story about 'a day in the life of a superhero' and this is what they came up with in the posts below.
Unfortunately due to the limited time and the children not being familiar with the software, we didn't finish. Can you suggest an ending?
I'd really appreciate it if you could help me by adding positive comments about the stories. Write about anything you liked in the story or thought that they did really well. A few suggestions of how it could be improved would also be welcome.
I will then show the children any comments on friday.
Thanks for your help. Mr Harrison
Unfortunately due to the limited time and the children not being familiar with the software, we didn't finish. Can you suggest an ending?
I'd really appreciate it if you could help me by adding positive comments about the stories. Write about anything you liked in the story or thought that they did really well. A few suggestions of how it could be improved would also be welcome.
I will then show the children any comments on friday.
Thanks for your help. Mr Harrison
A day in the life of a super hero. Story 1.
One powerful day in the underworld, Captain haremdon and his side kick Dr Dufice was planning how to get revenge on their enemy Doctor Snipe. Doctor Snipe was a very gross person because he had super powers that made Dr Dufuce puke. Dr Snipe lived beyond the underworld in the overworld. We need to get revenge on Dr Snipe and the evil Villians Shouted Dr duface. "save your breath for the villians" ordered Captain Haredom
Meanwhile Dr Snipe was planning to steal a diamond from the museum to sell it for money. That night Dr Snipe turned to slime and crawled his way up to the diamond room. He stretched himsself to the diamond and used one of his snakes to reach it. The snake dropped it in his pocket and he sneaked out. The next day Captain Haredemdom responded that their had been a robbery." It was possibly Dr Snipe "Captain Haredemdom reported.
"Yes I agree with you" said doctor doofus"it is Doctor snipe he's the only villan around here in the underworld."I'm going to fight him" annouced Captin haremdon.''well I was
geting on to that bit'' muttered a strange voisce from the coner it was the spooky
reporter that always scrays dr dufes.''I hraed that dr snip is after both of you to
fight you and his army was after every thing he wants including YOU!''.then the man left the lab with haremdon standing tall and dr dufes crowching down low behind
haremdon.''Are we relly going to do this fight'' aked dr dufes ''yes we are'' replied haremdon.'' ow'' dr dufes sadly said.
The next day, the battle took place.Dr Doofus had called all his Doofus friends to
fight for Haremdon...
Written by Em, Br and Ha
Meanwhile Dr Snipe was planning to steal a diamond from the museum to sell it for money. That night Dr Snipe turned to slime and crawled his way up to the diamond room. He stretched himsself to the diamond and used one of his snakes to reach it. The snake dropped it in his pocket and he sneaked out. The next day Captain Haredemdom responded that their had been a robbery." It was possibly Dr Snipe "Captain Haredemdom reported.
"Yes I agree with you" said doctor doofus"it is Doctor snipe he's the only villan around here in the underworld."I'm going to fight him" annouced Captin haremdon.''well I was
geting on to that bit'' muttered a strange voisce from the coner it was the spooky
reporter that always scrays dr dufes.''I hraed that dr snip is after both of you to
fight you and his army was after every thing he wants including YOU!''.then the man left the lab with haremdon standing tall and dr dufes crowching down low behind
haremdon.''Are we relly going to do this fight'' aked dr dufes ''yes we are'' replied haremdon.'' ow'' dr dufes sadly said.
The next day, the battle took place.Dr Doofus had called all his Doofus friends to
fight for Haremdon...
Written by Em, Br and Ha
A day in the life of a super hero. Story 2.
Sadly we didn't get as far with this story as I had hoped.
One day there was a super hero called suzzy king. He was a kid called joe just an ordinary kid with a family.
Dr Z was a old man lived in an under cover lab his best freind is joe. But Dr z lied to joe about him being evil. Then joe realised that he was working for evil.called unlimeted power . so then joe ice freezed his arm forever.
There was also a monster. The monster has 37 eyes he is slimy and lives in a volcano. The floor began to rumble under the ground when he was sleeping and it started to shakes. All of a sudden rocks began to fall down and the monster woke up.the monster came into the new york cityand start destroying houses,
Written by Ti, Ty, Ad
One day there was a super hero called suzzy king. He was a kid called joe just an ordinary kid with a family.
Dr Z was a old man lived in an under cover lab his best freind is joe. But Dr z lied to joe about him being evil. Then joe realised that he was working for evil.called unlimeted power . so then joe ice freezed his arm forever.
There was also a monster. The monster has 37 eyes he is slimy and lives in a volcano. The floor began to rumble under the ground when he was sleeping and it started to shakes. All of a sudden rocks began to fall down and the monster woke up.the monster came into the new york cityand start destroying houses,
Written by Ti, Ty, Ad
My project.
If you are interested, the basic premise of the project is below.
Does using ICT as a collaborative tool improve the quality of children's writing?
The new school curriculum states that children in ICT will learn how to 'collaborate, communicate and share information using connectivity to work with, and present to, people and audiences within and beyond the school'
I am going to examine what impact using a web 2.0 application (such as primary pad) as a collaborative tool has on the quality of children's story writing. Does children working together in an online environment, where they are free to share creative ideas and view each others use of vocabulary, lead to an improvement when the same children are writing independently. I will monitor the progress of six children, by examining their story writing at the beginning of the process, paying particular attention to their use of vocabulary. I will then split these children into two groups. One group will write one story by collaborating in a traditional manner around a table. The other group will write a story by collaborating using ICT. I will compare these stories and assess their work when writing independently to see if using web technology is a better way for children to collaborate. Which group of children will make more progress in their writing?
Does using ICT as a collaborative tool improve the quality of children's writing?
The new school curriculum states that children in ICT will learn how to 'collaborate, communicate and share information using connectivity to work with, and present to, people and audiences within and beyond the school'
I am going to examine what impact using a web 2.0 application (such as primary pad) as a collaborative tool has on the quality of children's story writing. Does children working together in an online environment, where they are free to share creative ideas and view each others use of vocabulary, lead to an improvement when the same children are writing independently. I will monitor the progress of six children, by examining their story writing at the beginning of the process, paying particular attention to their use of vocabulary. I will then split these children into two groups. One group will write one story by collaborating in a traditional manner around a table. The other group will write a story by collaborating using ICT. I will compare these stories and assess their work when writing independently to see if using web technology is a better way for children to collaborate. Which group of children will make more progress in their writing?
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