One powerful day in the underworld, Captain haremdon and his side kick Dr Dufice was planning how to get revenge on their enemy Doctor Snipe. Doctor Snipe was a very gross person because he had super powers that made Dr Dufuce puke. Dr Snipe lived beyond the underworld in the overworld. We need to get revenge on Dr Snipe and the evil Villians Shouted Dr duface. "save your breath for the villians" ordered Captain Haredom
Meanwhile Dr Snipe was planning to steal a diamond from the museum to sell it for money. That night Dr Snipe turned to slime and crawled his way up to the diamond room. He stretched himsself to the diamond and used one of his snakes to reach it. The snake dropped it in his pocket and he sneaked out. The next day Captain Haredemdom responded that their had been a robbery." It was possibly Dr Snipe "Captain Haredemdom reported.
"Yes I agree with you" said doctor doofus"it is Doctor snipe he's the only villan around here in the underworld."I'm going to fight him" annouced Captin haremdon.''well I was
geting on to that bit'' muttered a strange voisce from the coner it was the spooky
reporter that always scrays dr dufes.''I hraed that dr snip is after both of you to
fight you and his army was after every thing he wants including YOU!''.then the man left the lab with haremdon standing tall and dr dufes crowching down low behind
haremdon.''Are we relly going to do this fight'' aked dr dufes ''yes we are'' replied haremdon.'' ow'' dr dufes sadly said.
The next day, the battle took place.Dr Doofus had called all his Doofus friends to
fight for Haremdon...
Written by Em, Br and Ha
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This story is amazing, I can't wait to find out who wins the battle!
ReplyDeleteJessica
Nice story! It wouldn't be very good if a villan could make you sick! Nice idea though!
ReplyDeleteSteve
Great use of descriptions - I can really picture the characters in my mind. I loved the way Dr Snipe turned to slime and stretched himself onto the diamond, great idea and use of imagination.
ReplyDeleteMy ending is: They had a big battle, Dr Snipe turned himself into slime again during the battle and tried to slime over Dr Doofus. When they were fighting Dr Snipe used his superpower and made Doofus sick, the sick covered the slime and killed Dr Snipe. The diamond was returned and everyone had a huge party to celebrate!
Exciting story. I liked the idea of Dr Snipe turning to slime!
ReplyDeleteIdea for ending -
Dr Doofus and his Doofus friends rushed in search of Dr Snipe. All they saw were Dr Snipe's snakes hanging from the ceiling and in all the nooks and crannies. They didn't spot the big blob of slime looking at them! Dr Doofus called one of his Doofus friends who was a "Snake Charmer". He played his lute to pacify the snakes, and whilst the snakes were listening to the tune, Dr Doofus and his Doofus friends rushed on past the slime. Capt Haremdom appeared and shouted "You dim wits look at the slime - it has eyes! Look there's the diamond in the pocket in the slime!" They all rushed at the slime, which slithered and slipped into a crack. But the diamond in the pocket was too big to go through the crack and Dr Doofus grabbed it, just as the rest of the slime oozed and slithered out of sight.
Quite scary and gruesome, we like the characters' names and are impressed by correct use of quotation marks. The early part of story is very well structured and logical.
ReplyDeleteMaggie & Wendy
For a moment I thought I was reading a piece by my favourite author Stephen King. I liked the descriptions and characters. I have a feeling that a giant jar of mayonaise is going to catapult into Dr Snipe and that will be that.
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