Sadly we didn't get as far with this story as I had hoped.
One day there was a super hero called suzzy king. He was a kid called joe just an ordinary kid with a family.
Dr Z was a old man lived in an under cover lab his best freind is joe. But Dr z lied to joe about him being evil. Then joe realised that he was working for evil.called unlimeted power . so then joe ice freezed his arm forever.
There was also a monster. The monster has 37 eyes he is slimy and lives in a volcano. The floor began to rumble under the ground when he was sleeping and it started to shakes. All of a sudden rocks began to fall down and the monster woke up.the monster came into the new york cityand start destroying houses,
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Wow, if a monster had 37 eyes he would be able to see lots of stuff!
ReplyDeleteWell done guys, you have a good start to your story!
Steve
Great start, I like the fact that Joe is an ordinary boy,it means that people can relate to the story.
ReplyDeleteThere is lots of scope as to where the story can go from here....maybe the monster will start to destroy most of New York, Dr Z will jump on his back and encourage him telling the monster where to go. The monster heads towards Joe's family's house. Joe sees it coming and turns into superhero "Suzzy King" he sends the Monster into a trance, the monster gets sleepey and lies down. Suzzy King then captures Dr Z and ties up the Monster and New York is safe again. The Mayor wants to reward the hero but...no one knows who or where he is...!
I liked the idea of a slimy monster with 37 eyes! Scary that the monster is knocking down houses in New York City.
ReplyDeleteI think an idea for the ending would be that Superhero Suzzy King and Joe lay a trap to catch the monster - They maybe hang a huge net from the sky scrapers and attract him there by a trail of carrots as a monster with 37 eyes needs to eat lots of carrots to see in the dark!
Highly imaginative, but sadly a little too short to really comment on the content and structure. It looks promising if the 2 parts of the story can be developed a bit further and shown how they link together.
ReplyDeleteMaggie and Wendy
This story has lots of potential, with a superhero, an elderly doctor in a secret lab and the menace of Unlimited Evil lurking in the background. My guess is that the doctor created the monster on the orders of U.E. and loses control of it. Enter Joe as superhero SK, who knocks the monster off the Statue of Liberty, so destroying it, and then hacks into Unlimitedevil.com and wipes out their hard drive, so they can't control other people any more.
ReplyDeleteI would like to live in a volcano with the monster, I think it would be warm. I think that the story has a lot of potential and could be developed further.
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